Find the Thrill

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If sentences run along like this bamboo, where's the thrill?

Color the greenery with irises, roses, and a daisy or two.

Write like a moving camera to take in the scenery and tease each moment. 

Let the reader experience your subject as you go. Don't tell everything.

Add the spice of sound and scent along the way. 

Spark vitality and add texture when you taste the honeysuckle. Mix and match short and long sentences. This gives the reader a breather. Avoid the use of too many "to be" verbs in sentence after sentence.

Promise yourself to avoid "is" "am" "was" "were" and "ings" for a day.

Adjectives and adverbs sprout like weeds among the "beautiful" flowers. They choke the essence from nouns and verbs that drive the sentences. Why write "beautiful" when you can show the iris float above its stalk like a banner in the wind?

Listen to bird songs and see if you can duplicate the trills on the page. Show the ping of water that splashes in a fountain.

Take a walk and record like a camera. Return home and write from your discoveries.